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I Thought I Knew

 

 

The craze of wonder bent with curiosity of will

Trapped inside a snow globe clear from mist

Watching those I knew break ties and lie for thrill

Losing heart in humans, something missed

  
 

A princess or a prince no more inside

Tainted, stained, defiled by the light

I wrapped my arms about my knees and cried

For loss of love from those who lost the right

 
 

The flakes of innocence about my lash

And piling on the rocks and hills and isle

And trapping me inside this glass-cut cache

While those I thought I knew pretend to smile

  
This is my response to recent activity in my life. Sometimes, writing a poem can put so much in perspective.

~Azedarach
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:iconvalerietoskodes:
Very emotional and expressive. You did an excellent job of scribing a mental environment and adding a few layers of meaning to it. I couldn't recognize the rhythm of the poem, though.
The sadness and hurt came through very well and expresses a lot about you, and what's going on around you. The snow was an interesting touch and added a lot--it brings to mind childhood and the simple pleasure of winter weather.
I enjoy how much thinking it takes to fully understand the poem, and even then, it's the faintest mystery, which is descriptive in and of itself. Well done.
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Themanwhokilledhomes Jan 31, 2013
yo yo yo my criticqe was rejected
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Azedarach Jan 31, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
For a reason, unfortunately. Please do not bother me with your useless comments. I wrote this poem for a reason and I won't tolerate your heedless disrespect for it.
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Xovinx Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so good at writing those emotional poems. Beautiful, but sad. That's my critic, right there. :)

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messie2624 Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice!
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Azedarach Jan 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you. :)
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